My slow writing challenge

Cautiously ,I take a step towards the light ahead of me.It was like the gleaming sun was hidden in the trees but it did not produce the same warmth inside me. What is it? was the only thing I could think.I began to scarper towards the light.The light suddenly faded, I was stuck in the middle of living hell!A few seconds later I saw something, a cloaked figure emerging from the mist…

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5 thoughts on “My slow writing challenge

  1. A very dramatic ending Lucy, I agree with the other comments; I really want to read on. I really like your description of how the sun doesn’t produce the same warmth inside you.

    Your first sentence is in the present tense – what do you notice about the rest of your paragraph?

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