Slow writing

Suddenly, I started running. I saw something move in the darkness, like a lion stalking on its prey before it pounces.I shouted “WHAT DO YOU WANT WITH ME?” Something was growling in the gloomy night.I heard something behind me, they’re were hundreds of them I screamed out “HELP!” Then finally one came away from the darkness, the face will scare me for life.

3 thoughts on “Slow writing

  1. There is some terrific language in here Kimi, well done. This really shows what you can do when you slow down and think about your content. I particularly love your simile and your description of one coming away from the darkness.

    The best thing is that you haven’t actually told the reader what it is you saw – I’m dying to find out!

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