Slow writing

It was snowing it crunched under my feet it was freezing it was as if the whole word was frozen.The car froze. I was getting ready to go, then school got cancelled.I was as happy as a person getting a present.  I spent all day with my  brother. slowly I walked away, when my broter got to sleep.

5 thoughts on “Slow writing

  1. You have followed the rules correctly Kimi, and have projected your character’s emotions very well.

    Read the first sentence aloud – what do you notice?

  2. Wow. You have included some lovely powerful words. My favourite sentence is the first one because it has great words and vocabulary in it. Keep it up!

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