11 thoughts on “My 500 word challenge

  1. This is such a gripping story Dylan.I love the way you put the big dillema in capitals to show it was important.The type of font you have used makes it very eye-catching.

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  2. You have included a lot of detail here Dylan. I’m really pleased you have been trying to improve on both your punctuation and spelling – you should be very proud.

    The first two paragraphs are brilliant openers and really pull the reader in. Try to slow down your writing and keep to this high standard!

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  3. Well done Dylan. You have included a time connective at the start of the story. You have included more detail. This story pulls the reader in! keep up the good work! 🙂

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