11 thoughts on “My 500 word challenge

  1. This is such a gripping story Dylan.I love the way you put the big dillema in capitals to show it was important.The type of font you have used makes it very eye-catching.

  2. You have included a lot of detail here Dylan. I’m really pleased you have been trying to improve on both your punctuation and spelling – you should be very proud.

    The first two paragraphs are brilliant openers and really pull the reader in. Try to slow down your writing and keep to this high standard!

  3. Well done Dylan. You have included a time connective at the start of the story. You have included more detail. This story pulls the reader in! keep up the good work! 🙂

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