100wc -The Shadow

As I went on a l amble round my caravan. I looked up at the sky and thought , deep into the charcoal-swirl sky I wondered about all them things  could be out there.A car came darting down almost running in to me .I gave a high pitched squeal what was to become of my future?

The car stopped suddenly.I felt a sheering pain in my hip .I put my hand there it was soaked in a scarlet mixture.This made the pain even worse.I looked up I saw a figure that looked like a shadow driving the car.I only knew one thing it was not human!

12 thoughts on “100wc -The Shadow

  1. I really enjoyed reading this Lucy. You have managed to cram lots of drama into just 100 words.

    I would advise rereading your work before you submit – check your first sentence for example! What do you think could be improved?

  2. dear Lucy,

    I really like your story called the shadow. your writing is amazing!

    from Chris 4TF shrewsbury international school bangkok

  3. Dear Lucy,

    I really like your 100WC because you included lots of powerful adjectives. However, I don’t know what Amble means.

    From Yam
    Shrewsbury International school Bangkok Year 4

  4. Dear Lucy,

    Your 100wc is so amazing?
    Your writing make me scared?
    Keep going on Lucy, I hope you will like it

    By : Meme – Shrewsbury international school Bangkok

  5. Dear Lucy,

    Your 100wc is so amazing?
    Your writing make me scared?
    Keep going on Lucy

    By : Meme Shrewsbury international school Bangkok

  6. I liked the sentence starter ‘The car stopped suddenly’ it’s a good way to start the sentence with mystery for the reader before they have reached the end. Well done Lucy, keep it up!

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