100wc

 

100wc 

 

One day a boy called Bob white horse was walking to school when a large limo came up to Bob school  and  said to Bob you are going to be the president of the united states of america . Bob could not believe that he is the president josh his shauffeur took him to the white house and showed him all the rooms. The biggest room is his bedroom it has  72 inch TV kings size bed a hot tub all of the consoles in the world. josh shows Bob a secret room under the house he opened the door. Look at all that chocolate!

 

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8 thoughts on “100wc

  1. You built your story up very well Dylan – you have a very vivid imagination!

    I do agree with Francesca though – a few more full stops would help your story to flow more.

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  2. Well done Dylan! This is a good 100wc!

    At the begging where it says ‘America ‘ that should have a capital letter because it is a proper noun!
    But as well as that keep up the hard work!

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  3. I wondered if I was reading the right blog when I first read it. I was wondering where the ‘chocolate’ bit was going to be. What a lovely surprise to find it in the secret room in the White House! I thought that this was very clever and imaginative. Well done!

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