100 word challenge

 

 

Today it is Tuesday, I am at Gymnastics. We toss, we turn, we flip, we flick. I only started three weeks before so I was a beginner. My teacher, Charlotte, with long, brown, beautiful hair, approaches me. She had never properly talked to me before. She whispers to me “ I think you’re ready to move on to harder tasks.”

I was petrified when she said that. “A SOMERSAULT?” I shout.


Here I go. Going to spin in the air at my full speed. Running up the track, heart pounding, arm aching. I hit the ground. Suddenly the pain in my arm got worse. What had happened?

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3 thoughts on “100 word challenge

  1. This is a great 100wc. It tells you where the accident happened and I like the way how you put a question at the end!
    Well Done! 🙂

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  2. Hi Lucy,
    This is a great piece of work. Because it is written in the present tense, it seems to make me want to keep reading to see what happens next. I also like your use of repetition ‘heart pounding, arm aching’. Well done.
    Mrs Prior – Team 100WC

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  3. Wonderful writing Lucy. You are really developing your writing skills, particularly with the way you are varying the length of your sentences. Your use of more advanced punctuation continues to improve as well – keep it up!

    Could we improve the sentence opener ‘suddenly’? Could we use an adverbial phrase?

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