my 100wc

One day there lived a brave man called Dave. Dave is a police officer. He was doing a investigation on a murdera. Dave was walking home suddenly dave heard a gunshot. Ran a fast as he could to the center of town but is was just a plastic gun. So Dave just turned around and continued walking.When Dave got home he had his dinner and went to bed. The next day Dave got up and did his daily routine.Dave went out for a walk he saw alot of people that he didn’t now.BANG A MAN SHOT HIM suddenly there’s pain in my arm.

 

2 thoughts on “my 100wc

  1. You have built up this story very well Dylan, including an improvement with your punctuation (but do keep checking!)

    Niamh is right – you have changed the point of view from which you are writing.

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