I love the way you ended with a terrific question at the end. This is an amazing story. It tells you where you were when the accident happened, it tells you what happened after the accident and ends with a fantastic question.
Well done on your hard work on the 100wc 🙂
Your 100wc is great I really like your beginning. 🙂
It must have been a dream, as I am sure that your mum would listen!
Keep up the good writing.
Well done Chiara, your 100wc entry is full of description – you are showing great improvement in this area. You have also varied the length of your sentences to change the pace of your story which makes it more interesting to read.
Try not to repeat yourself – you used the prompt twice, using valuable words when you could have been saying something else!
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