This is very good Joe. I like how you put your arm was bleeding like a bursting volcano 🙂
This is excellent work Joe well done I like
A very descriptive 100wc Joe. You have shown that you can paint a picture with your words as you have set the scene so well.
Your final sentences needs punctuating a little more carefully – can you spot where?
Wow! What a well thought out composition.
Well done! Your description of the bleeding “…like a bursting volcano” drive home your intension of making the scene excalate.
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