4 thoughts on “The Crash

  1. This is very good Joe. I like how you put your arm was bleeding like a bursting volcano 🙂
    Good work!

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  2. A very descriptive 100wc Joe. You have shown that you can paint a picture with your words as you have set the scene so well.

    Your final sentences needs punctuating a little more carefully – can you spot where?

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  3. Wow! What a well thought out composition.
    Well done! Your description of the bleeding “…like a bursting volcano” drive home your intension of making the scene excalate.

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