100wc

I went outside for lunch and suddenly a big shadowy figure appeared behind me.As it got taller and taller i turned around and dropped my books. It was the meanest gang in school called 4gang, i shouted for help but they just covered my mouth with their hand. I was hopeless by myself.As one of them grabbed my jumper, i covered my face with my arm. As they prepared to punch me i closed my eyes punch, suddenly the pain in my arm shattered. I looked up as they said hey up my duck, putting their arm around my neck.Best friends forever buddy.

 

8 thoughts on “100wc

  1. This is brilliant 100WC but I just didn’t really understand the
    ending part I think you should just work on that

  2. This is a thoughtful story about bullying. Did you mean at the end that they didn’t realise how much they were hurting and thought bullying was just a laugh? I do like your description of a ‘shadowy figure’ and the ‘meanest gang’, well done. Jane Team 100wc

  3. I enjoyed this 100wc Francesca; it is lovely to see you thinking about the book we are reading to help plan.

    From what I understand, the ending is the gang talking to you. It is a powerful ending but speech punctuation would have made it clearer to your readers!

  4. This is a lovely piece of writing, Francesca! I understood the ending but I think Mr Connor is right: it would have been clearer with speech punctuation.

    Well done, keep up the great writing. 🙂

  5. Hi Francesca, This is a well-written piece for the 100wc and you have also chosen an important subject to write about. Well done!

  6. Thank you all for your comments I really appreciate them.Thank you for the advice I will try do that next time.Thank you all! 🙂

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